Narrators Needed for Children's Show on Radio Fairfax
finnz for Narrator
The objective is not to sound like you are reading; you're supposed to be retelling a story. I expect you to edit your work.
Of what use was it to be loved and lose one's beauty and become Real if it all ended like this? And a tear, a real tear, trickled down his little shabby velvet nose and fell to the ground.
And then a strange thing happened. For where the tear had fallen a flower grew out of the ground, a mysterious flower, not at all like any that grew in the garden. It had slender green leaves the colour of emeralds, and in the centre of the leaves a blossom like a golden cup. It was so beautiful that the little Rabbit forgot to cry, and just lay there watching it. And presently the blossom opened, and out of it there stepped a fairy.
She was quite the loveliest fairy in the whole world. Her dress was of pearl and dew-drops, and there were flowers round her neck and in her hair, and her face was like the most perfect flower of all. And she came close to the little Rabbit and gathered him up in her arms and kissed him on his velveteen nose that was all damp from crying.
"Little Rabbit," she said, "don't you know who I am?
"The Rabbit looked up at her, and it seemed to him that he had seen her face before, but he couldn't think where.
"I am the nursery magic Fairy," she said. "I take care of all the playthings that the children have loved. When they are old and worn out and the children don't need them any more, then I come and take them away with me and turn them into Real."
"Wasn't I Real before?" asked the little Rabbit.
"You were Real to the Boy," the Fairy said, "because he loved you. Now you shall be Real to every one."
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All feedback very welcome!
It sounds like it is raining outside. If you ever try do this professionally, do not included anything in your audition except what you are asked for, aside from the script. There is mouth noise immediately before you begin speaking and the sound is too quiet. At least at first, it sounds like you are reading and as fast as you can. There is no sense of emotion. The more I listen, the more I think what first sounded like rain, is actually saliva. There is a sweeping sound after "and there stepped a fairy". It sounds better now that you are taking more pauses, but I think it is because you were not breathing before. For the purpose of this project, you would need to edit all of those out.
definitely doable. Would you like me to redo it/resubmit the same file but with the mouth noise edited out?
I was more meaning that if you were selected to participate in the project, you would always be expected to edit out your breaths. You would need to submit a new recording of the auditioning script to be reconsidered for the role. Editing cannot resolve the issues that it sounds like you are reading; not narrating, and too fast at that. The difference between narrating and reading is it should sound like you are retelling a story as one who observed it. If you want to see the difference, I recommend you try recording yourself while you tell your wife the script in your own words and listen to it and your audition again.