Haylee Doyon Retake #2!

I'll go ahead and review this audition over the other one seeing as how this is the more recent one. I really like your reading on this one, but the emotion behind it seems rather lacking, as if you weren't sure the degree to which you should emote behind the lines. Despite that, however, it's still an improvement from your first audition so kudos on that. I'd suggest practicing the lines while over exaggerating the emotions, then dialing back accordingly after you've listened to the recordings a few times. The way you pace the lines is also rather off-putting, but from my experience, that comes from not accurately reading the longer lines before hand, thus being caught off guard by a sentence continuing where you thought it should end. The only remedy to this is to practice the lines a few times before reading it all in one, even, go. Lastly, the tantrum bit is a little more than lacking, which is completely understandable. It's a difficult read even for experienced VAs. The idea behind that section is that the character Haylee is taking out her frustrations with her father and his stubbornness and old-timey moral practices against her personal belongings. She's extra frustrated, and your reading doesn't portray that very well. Instead it sounds like, for lack of a better term, "deadpan fight game noises". Other than those few things, your recording quality and clarity is top notch. It even took me a few times listening through to realize you might have an accent that you're hiding very well. All I suggest is that you practice your emotional arsenal through live action and theatre if possible. It'll help you tap into a realm of abilities you've yet to uncover! Best of luck, I know you'll improve.