Narrators Needed for Children's Show on Radio Fairfax
lawnis04 for Narrator
The objective is not to sound like you are reading; you're supposed to be retelling a story. I expect you to edit your work.
Of what use was it to be loved and lose one's beauty and become Real if it all ended like this? And a tear, a real tear, trickled down his little shabby velvet nose and fell to the ground.
And then a strange thing happened. For where the tear had fallen a flower grew out of the ground, a mysterious flower, not at all like any that grew in the garden. It had slender green leaves the colour of emeralds, and in the centre of the leaves a blossom like a golden cup. It was so beautiful that the little Rabbit forgot to cry, and just lay there watching it. And presently the blossom opened, and out of it there stepped a fairy.
She was quite the loveliest fairy in the whole world. Her dress was of pearl and dew-drops, and there were flowers round her neck and in her hair, and her face was like the most perfect flower of all. And she came close to the little Rabbit and gathered him up in her arms and kissed him on his velveteen nose that was all damp from crying.
"Little Rabbit," she said, "don't you know who I am?
"The Rabbit looked up at her, and it seemed to him that he had seen her face before, but he couldn't think where.
"I am the nursery magic Fairy," she said. "I take care of all the playthings that the children have loved. When they are old and worn out and the children don't need them any more, then I come and take them away with me and turn them into Real."
"Wasn't I Real before?" asked the little Rabbit.
"You were Real to the Boy," the Fairy said, "because he loved you. Now you shall be Real to every one."
***If you want my feedback, tell me so in the comments. ***
Hello! I absolutely adore the concept of this project, and whether or not I am a good fit for it, I just wanted to say that I really appreciate the work you're doing for a cause such as this.
Also, I feel bad asking for feedback because there are so many auditions for you to go through, but if you have time, it would be much appreciated.
I appreciate the support. There is a pop between "become real" and "if it all ended like this". Your pauses between statements could be cut at least in half. There is a weird sound on "a strange thing happened". I like the way you expressed "so beautiful". There is another pop after "flower of all". The way you read, "when they are old and worn out, then I take them away w/me and turn them into real" sounds the most natural in your audition. Overall, your performance lacked energy and I think you should focus on that first. Feel free to audition again and you are always welcome to accept a role on staff.
Thank you! I'll give it another go or two and see what I can improve upon. I appreciate you taking the time to critique.