Zero Angel's War of the Ages: The Throne of Ao (Seeking Supporting and Minor Roles)
DrakoV72 for Deckard Saerul - The Weather General
Deckard Saerul is a roguish character with a lifespan apparently longer than his capacity for mead. Deckard seems to have a hand in everything.
(Give a British and American take.)
[After cheekily, picking the pockets of the MCs as a jest]
“Only seventeen copper pieces. Hardly worth the effort. No stealing amongst allies anyways one of the rules. Always need to have rules; otherwise you wouldn’t know what you were breaking.”[Panacea = pa·nuh·see·uh]
“Some legends are truer than others. At least the Panacea is something that will bring happiness to many if it is found. If you pledge yourself to our cause here, I will help you take a step closer to your legends.”“The first casualty of any battle is the plan, Uriel. A commander needs to think on his feet. Had your group not come, this would not be the plan, but you know as well as I that no one here is as strong as you. You are full of lightning, fury and power, and I know you and your friends can do it
Alright, I don't often do voice criticisms so I'll do my best to help out here. Over all not bad, you have a few decent moments and you played with the tempo in places which is good. Your two takes of the first line a really similar, if you're doing multiple takes of a line be encouraged to vary them up and show different styles or emotions, your other lines had more variation, but it's worth remembering to change things up and show more of your range. Beyond that when you do slow down to list things be careful not to make it too staccato, if you break it up to much it can loose energy and flow, unless you're making a conscious character choice you never want a line to feel dead. When you get juicy words like in the last line with "You are full of lighting, fury and power" those are great times to play with the line, are you awestruck? Do you really emphasize the power of the words? What if in one take you're more fearful of their power? Play with different emphasis and see what you come up with, you can often stumble unto character choices. Lastly just a general note, while it isn't bad, you can hear some background room tone in your audio, two possible easy fixes for that without actually turning off fans and vents would be to turn the gain down a little on your mic so maybe it doesn't pick it up as easy, or add a noise gate to your audio with a low dB threshold. If I ever get ambient room noise in a take, usually a noise gate set to about -40 to -35 dB will cut any background hum without taking away from my own audio, but you might have to play with it a little. And that's about what I got, hope it's useful.
Thank you for taking the time to tell me this stuff. I'll try to keep them in mind. I want to do this full time as a career, so I keep looking for ways to improve. Real quick (this is not an excuss) but that background noise was the wind outside my house XD I didn't realize it was blowing that hard. So, no recording when it's windy out...at least until I get better stuff. Again, thank you your help was much appreciated.
You're welcome man, no worries. :)