#Inane Ideas - An Anthology podcast
seahaas for Preacher
The Preacher appears in the story "Gods of the Erasi". The Preacher is giving this oration on the street in an ancient metropolis. So the delivery should be impassioned and ceremonial.
Gather! Hear the tale of our gods:
We, born of earth and come screaming into the world, praise Eruon and Sakya- father earth and mother wind- for shaping us from his clay and filling us with her breath of life...
In time, Orodon grew bored and annoyed with the brief splashes of color, viewing them as mockery from his younger brother. Too short were the displays, the flowers prone to drooping and losing the brilliant petals that mirrored the sun's own face as if to say, "Look, Brother! See how your own glory fades each day".
So it went for eons: Eruon trying to please his brother, Orodon's jealousy raging forth, and Sakya providing succor and love to her husband and children.
Hi there, Seahaas! I'm the writer for this particular role :) I felt there was a little too much inflection within same words at the beginning. You were probably just trying to find your feet, which is fine, especially with how little context sits within just a few lines. Overall, I thought it was pretty good! There are a couple of things that I would maybe comment on if we were to talk over Discord (rhythm, pronunciations of the names, little things like that). "Look, Brother! See how your own glory fades each day" Was delivered well.
Thank you for the feedback! I was definitely struggling with how to approach this one but I really appreciate you taking the time to comment on some of the things that I could work on! :)