Project: Vigilante, Game Changers Arc
IronBeard for Pierce Burnham
Deadline: 7th November
Voice/Language: Moody, plenty of slang; cusses often (add them where you see fit); deep voice; no (heavy) accents
History/relationships: Jack of Spades, doesn't think he's worthy enough to call himself a friend to them but gets along with others in The Spades
Personality: Not at all a fan of Reaper or her friends, especially as they're always bothering The Spades, whom he has spent over a year with. His strong dislike is shared by other members of the The Spades. He dropped out of school, but although he's not intelligent, he's far from incompetent.
Feel free to vary on wording or tone, I'd like to hear what you've got!
Annoyed
"Look what the cat dragged in. "
Mocking
"Talk about hopeless. Don’t fall in a ditch while we’re not looking."
Thoughtful
The Spades...are my home. It's my job to make sure everything remains in order, because no one wants a dumpster of a home.
Questioning, interrogative
I'm here because I serve a purpose. I make sure those Diamond idiots don't get too cocky and keep things in check when Alvah's too busy baby sitting you or Rai is out on actual jobs. Why are you here?
Monologue; annoyed, exasperated, threatening
"Jack of Spades? Yeah, that's me, what's up? Again? No way, keep The Spades out of this, we're not her personal janitors." [sigh] "Honestly, how can someone be so incompetent? I feel sorry for Rai, imagine having to deal with that for years. What? No, I joined last year, was in a sticky situation. I owe Rai, big time, so if I catch you trash-talking him or The Spades because of that sorry excuse of a human being, expect a knife through your neck."
The number of times you cussed throughout this was amusing, I actually smiled haha. I think your pitch suits this character, though your emphasis on words (that aren't cusses) could do with a bit of work. Your emotive tones and pacing overall are great, however, seem to falter just a bit during the longer lines. I enjoyed the audition though, so thank you!
Thank you for the constructive criticism. It is very much appreciated!