Carcerem: A Visual Novel
Vex Astram for Amanda
(Friendly) Oh hey, you're the new kid, right? Hi, I'm Amanda! Nice to meet you! I hope you enjoy our school, I think it's pretty great. All the teachers are really nice.
(Teasing) Oh come on Moreison, it's just a little BB gun, what are you so afraid of?
(Crying/Yelling) You want to know why I skip school? Hmmm!? Do you!? It's because every single day I scream at myself on the inside. Constantly telling myself that I'm worthless and there's nothing I can do about it!
Nice! You've got the tomboy voice down!
Wow...that was scarily amazing...I kinda don't wana audition now ^^;;; I hope you get the part! You totally deserve it!
Dude yes! Sounds so Character Actor perfect! Nice job! I would love your feedback on my take too
I think my only critizisum is that I lost you on the last lines for the emotional text. You are really good at friendly and teasing tones. When it comes to emotional tones it could use some deeper digging on what choices you make at what part and what you feel in that moment. It felt very surface level. Like as if you were whimpering just to whimper not because you had a reason to do so. I hope this was helpful!