Frog Raccoon Strawberry: The Animated Series
Silver Diesel for Josh Lotor
Josh is a good guy. He's the leader of a band called "Rugburn Samurai" and he's the on-again-off-again love interest of Strawberry Fields. He wants to win Strawberry's affection but fails to see that she only sees herself as a frog and not a raccoon. He can be a bit emotional and tends to cry at the slightest hint of rejection. Despite that, he's still a nice kid.
[You just found out that your best friend has been telling the girl that has a crush on you to stay away from you. You're borderline pissed off] "What was all that business about Strawberry having to stay away from me, Marco?"
[You just got rejected by a girl that you've had a crush on, on Valentine's day. You're trying to recuperate but the tears start to flow.] "Okay, Strawberry. Maybe Next Time. I've got to get back to band practice. We're an Emo band and I'm properly miserable now..."
[You just got through showing some demos to your band after being dumped twice by two different girls. The band loves the demos and asks for your secret. In a depressed tone, you give a straight answer] "Well... Ever since my luck with girls has gone so sour, I've been absolutely miserable, you see..."
The reads on lines one and two are good. But I feel like you need to add more depression in your read on line three.
Thanks for the feedback. Also not sure if it's okay to try to redo it. Would that be welcomed?