So "wow" would be my first thought. You have a very smooth, velvety voice in this read. I am enthralled listening to the nostalgia of Mrs Nilimore, all the while getting hungry each time you mention "mint, mangosteen macaroons". There's really nothing critical I can say about your take as everything was good - audio quality, clarity, pacing (down to the pauses you take when there is multiple descriptive words ("nasty, nauseating..." comes to mind here). The piece evoked emotions and you've succeeded in doing just that.

I agree with mjrodriguez: Wow! Just, wow! I can hear you as an audio book narrator. Your pacing and emotion were really good.

Very nice job! I love the pacing here, it feels precise and consistent from start to finish. This also greatly helped your articulation! Your character is also good, although I wanted to hear more of that energy. You don't have to be "loud" persay, but whenever you smiled more or changed your tone to be salty or bittersweet, it always enchanced the read. Even more of that would be awesome. A bit more focus on articulation is always welcome as well, but overall you did a great job in all departments. Well done!