Nice job enunciating those t's and d's, I have SUCH a hard time with them. I like your little audible at the beginning, nice job recorrecting and getting right back into it. Good pacing! I hear quite a few mouth sounds in there, so possibly try to readjust your mic placement or see if water might help a dry mouth feel! Either way, though, nicely done!

Good job! My main thing I noticed right away is that you are saying "Peder" and "liddle," which while SUPER easy to do, is definitely the main practice point of this monologue. Your overall enunciation is fine, but these two sounds get switched around too often. Aside from that, your energy and passion is perfect, I love how excited you are about this story! You also nailed the pronunciations. A very good performance, just work more on that clarity!