I think you chose a great pace for this script! I think slightly speeding up during exciting portions serves as a pro when done occasionally since it adds a bit more variety and freshness into your read.

Great job with this! Articulation felt nice, and your pacing paired up rather well with it. Your "T" sounds especially sounded good to me. Sometimes, like it "terribly tough," I think it sounds just a bit too much like "D" to me, so keep that in mind for future reads. You nailed the "propitiated" pronunciation, good job! The only other thing I'd say is to add some more wonder to your voice. Just something that can entire listeners to continue listening. Overall, well done!