I definitely recommend working a lot on your projection. This is a difficult concept, and it comes with more practice and time, but I would say this is your biggest hurdle to work on. Volume does not equate entirely to projection, and I couldn't understand much of what you said, and that was mostly due to projection versus articulation. Your enunciation does also need work, so focus on slowing way down to give much more clarity to your words. That said, I can tell you were going for a friendly tone in your take, and I could definitely feel that! So nice work in that area. Overall, these are very common issues and you're going to become a much stronger actor once you pin-point these hurdles and specifically work on overcoming them. Good job!