Angels of Death RPG Game Fandub
Teeah for Rachel Gardener
Rachel is a 14 year old girl who finds herself in a blank room of an unfamiliar building. All she remembers is that she was in a hospital talking with her therapist, and that something happened to her parents. Beyond that her life up to this point is a mystery. In order for her to find herself and get out of this place she must encounter and conquer all the killers of this building and become victorious.
Towards the beginning she is a soft damsel in distress type with a high-mid tone of voice. She is very caring to those who are sick and injured and even is able to fix things that are dead. The moment she realizes her situation her personality becomes, hollow and semi-dead as if she has resigned herself to her fate as a sacrifice.
“There’s the bird from before… [something clicks and you become that soft, calm, but disparaging tone.] No…this one is different…it’s not the same bird…it didn’t look like this…that one didn’t look so pitiful…I’ll make you look like it did…don’t worry…you won’t hurt anymore…I’ll fix you up like you were my very own…”
[direct, but hollow] “Ask all you want, but my answer won’t change. I’m not going to kill you Zack. That’s the decision I’ve made. I’ll be happy for you to kill me…but…I wont let this end the way she wants…that woman is wrong…we are not tools…to murder…or give into death…those are OUR choices and ours alone…”
[Your gentle hollow voice trembles and are thoroughly terrified] “Y-You wrong…if there is no god…then…h-how am I supposed to go on?…L-Listen just because you sweared to God that you would kill me isn’t the only reason…E-Even if somebody else made the exact same promise to me…I-It still wouldn’t have been good enough…[“ok then why?”] U-um because…I-I don’t know I’m sorry…”
You are the only person who got the hollow sound of her voice! So congrats! Second I am pretty sure this is unedited audio right? Third is the critiques…so your pacing in the first sentence on line 0 was spot on and that transition from normal to hollow was perfect. Some of the pacing is off, really take your time with the lines especially ones where the “…” is placed. Also line 2 I would defiantly put more emotion into it, she is bordering crying/frantic/hysterical that “her god is fake.” But yeah other than those great job!
Thanks for the feedback! It is unedited, yes. I'll try working on pacing and evoking more emotion for line 3.