I thought your delivery was nice, it was very clean!

I like the quality of your voice, great take!

Nice read! Next time though, don't do any editing at all; we want to hear the raw file without any adjustments so we can give the best feedback possible. I like the nice tone to your voice. More energy is what I would recommend; right now, it feels a bit too simple and straight-forward, lacking in the passion department. Articulation was nice, so really my main focus would be increasing your projection levels! Nice work.