Your Turn to Die: Fandub
Ack I hate u for Kanna Kizuchi
In-game, Kanna is shown to be a person that resembles "a little sister". She can be dependent and often relies on other people to help her out, due to the fact that she often believes that she is incapable of helping herself or others. Kanna is shown to be easily upset, and is one of the most vulnerable and unstable of the group.
(whimpering) "Ahhhhhhh.... OOooohhh...."
(on the verge of tears) "Ah... thank you very much."
(timid, still whimpering) "I'll say.... I'm Kanna Kizuchi."
(getting worked up) "After....I came here... My sister... My sister.... Ahhhh.. (start screaming) AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!! SHE'S DEAD! MY SISTER! WHY?! HOW?! IT'S MY FAULT! WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHH!!"
(calm, soft yet questioning) "Sara... I-I.. I just really wanted to ask you, about my sister. Please give me an answer.. Back then, could Kanna have actually save her sister..?"
You have potential and it's on the right track, but I was distracted by the popping sounds on the "she's dead" line. I also feel like you could show more fear with the whimper at the beginning; it seems like it's more or less just panting. However you do kind of sound like you're on the verge of tears when thanking Sara, but I feel like you could do more. Also you're really holding back with the screaming, and screaming is vital to this. And I feel like the tone is a bit too low for her.
aaa, it was rlly late at night and i didnt wanna wake anyone, as i was meant to be asleep- ill try once my parents leave again ^^'